Post by Lilith on Jun 10, 2009 1:46:56 GMT -4
I am not Palari... clearly... but she wished for me to post this as she loves feedback. So... feedback?
Iron and Salt - By Palari
Look at him
The rockstar vampire
How magnetic and compelling he is
Dark and powerful
Ancient
Knowing
The Conductor
He has his audience in his thrall
Moves them
Manipulates
Makes love to them
Makes them crazy
And it leaves him empty
Hollow
Waiting again
To be filled
Yes
Now
Who is she?
Just a glimpse of her
In the crowd
Everyone moving
She is still
Holds his gaze
He can feel her heat from where he stands
Sense her heartbeat
Feel it pulse
And he hungers
And still she holds his gaze
While he sings of darkness and pain
Of power and beauty.
And then the crowd is spent and
Exhausted and happy and wandering out from the show.
And so is she
Exhausted
Wandering out of the stadium
Moving with the crowd
Out into the street
A limousine
Slides up silently beside her
A man gets out
A pale man
In a dark suit
He opens the passenger door
She looks inside
And there he is
The Conductor
Holding out his hand for her to join him
In the car
She takes his hand
Cool in hers
Slides in next to him
He watches her eyes
As her desire
Wrestles with her fear
Scared and turned on
He can smell her fear
And her hunger
She is strong
And her blood is hot
His eyes travel over her body
He wonders
Where it will be
That he sinks his teeth into her
He can see the carotid artery
Pulsing
Echoing in his ears...
Or will it be
The top of her creamy golden
Breast
Resting over her heart
Or will he part her legs
And bury his fangs
In her inner thigh
Have her flood into him from her
Femoral artery
With the scent of her
Thick in his nostrils
But no
That would kill her
Too quickly
So beautiful
So strong
His eyes meet hers again
Desire has won her inner argument
Her eyes are dark
Her heart is racing
She puts her mouth on his
Catches her lip on one of his fangs
Starts to bleed
Gasps
As she realises
That those fangs
Are really fangs
She puts her fingers to her mouth
And they come away bloody
So she swallows hard and
Gathers her courage
Offers them
To him
And he knows
She's not frightened
He takes her hand
Takes in the sight of her
Bloodied mouth
Sanguine fingers
He places her hand against his cheek
Marking his face
And then
Kisses her
Softly
Licking her lips
Tasting her
Knowing her
Deepens the kiss
As she continues to
Bleed
Iron and salt on his tongue
Rolling slowly
Around her mouth
In her mouth
He can taste her strength
Her lust
And then he discovers
That her hands
Are in his clothes
On his firm, hard skin
And his lips are cold because she has
Gone from there
Kissing a bloody trail down his throat
Her lips, her mouth
Warming his chest
His belly
And the taste of her is all there is
And he is torn between his hunger
And his desire
To feed
Or to
Fuck
He can feed any where
But to find her again
And now she is astride him
Her knees either side of his hips
Her hands in his hair
Kissing him again
He grazes kisses down her throat
Then his mouth has found the soft flesh of her
Breasts
And he slips her shirt off her shoulders
She presses herself against him
And again,
Her bare skin hot against him
She cuts herself
Open on his teeth
Deliberately this time
Opens herself to him
She has opened his pants too
She lifts herself up
Pushes herself down
As at the same time
He embeds his fangs in her flesh
Filling his mouth with her
Filling herself with him
Iron and salt
And heat and strength
And he drinks in her warmth
And she rides his heat
Taking him into her
Over and over
And she is falling into her heartbeat
And drowning in her pulse
Her pulse rushing through him
Tears sliding down her cheeks
Unbearable
Blinding him with bloodlust
As he draws more
He must have more of her
And she clings to him
Pressing into him
Offering it all
Even as her life starts to slip away
She offers more
He hears her heartbeat slow
Her pulse weaken
Feels her fading
He can't let go
But then he does
Tearing his mouth out of her body
Her life flowing down his chin
And filling him
With warmth
With life
With her
He holds her in his arms
Marveling at her surrender
He draws a claw across his own chest
And offers himself
He presses her mouth against his flesh
And she drinks
Takes him in
Once again
And she is his
And he is hers
And she drinks
His power flowing into her
Burning through her
Ending her
Beginning her
Remaking her
And he feels his power growing in her
And she feeds...
Iron and Salt - By Palari
Look at him
The rockstar vampire
How magnetic and compelling he is
Dark and powerful
Ancient
Knowing
The Conductor
He has his audience in his thrall
Moves them
Manipulates
Makes love to them
Makes them crazy
And it leaves him empty
Hollow
Waiting again
To be filled
Yes
Now
Who is she?
Just a glimpse of her
In the crowd
Everyone moving
She is still
Holds his gaze
He can feel her heat from where he stands
Sense her heartbeat
Feel it pulse
And he hungers
And still she holds his gaze
While he sings of darkness and pain
Of power and beauty.
And then the crowd is spent and
Exhausted and happy and wandering out from the show.
And so is she
Exhausted
Wandering out of the stadium
Moving with the crowd
Out into the street
A limousine
Slides up silently beside her
A man gets out
A pale man
In a dark suit
He opens the passenger door
She looks inside
And there he is
The Conductor
Holding out his hand for her to join him
In the car
She takes his hand
Cool in hers
Slides in next to him
He watches her eyes
As her desire
Wrestles with her fear
Scared and turned on
He can smell her fear
And her hunger
She is strong
And her blood is hot
His eyes travel over her body
He wonders
Where it will be
That he sinks his teeth into her
He can see the carotid artery
Pulsing
Echoing in his ears...
Or will it be
The top of her creamy golden
Breast
Resting over her heart
Or will he part her legs
And bury his fangs
In her inner thigh
Have her flood into him from her
Femoral artery
With the scent of her
Thick in his nostrils
But no
That would kill her
Too quickly
So beautiful
So strong
His eyes meet hers again
Desire has won her inner argument
Her eyes are dark
Her heart is racing
She puts her mouth on his
Catches her lip on one of his fangs
Starts to bleed
Gasps
As she realises
That those fangs
Are really fangs
She puts her fingers to her mouth
And they come away bloody
So she swallows hard and
Gathers her courage
Offers them
To him
And he knows
She's not frightened
He takes her hand
Takes in the sight of her
Bloodied mouth
Sanguine fingers
He places her hand against his cheek
Marking his face
And then
Kisses her
Softly
Licking her lips
Tasting her
Knowing her
Deepens the kiss
As she continues to
Bleed
Iron and salt on his tongue
Rolling slowly
Around her mouth
In her mouth
He can taste her strength
Her lust
And then he discovers
That her hands
Are in his clothes
On his firm, hard skin
And his lips are cold because she has
Gone from there
Kissing a bloody trail down his throat
Her lips, her mouth
Warming his chest
His belly
And the taste of her is all there is
And he is torn between his hunger
And his desire
To feed
Or to
Fuck
He can feed any where
But to find her again
And now she is astride him
Her knees either side of his hips
Her hands in his hair
Kissing him again
He grazes kisses down her throat
Then his mouth has found the soft flesh of her
Breasts
And he slips her shirt off her shoulders
She presses herself against him
And again,
Her bare skin hot against him
She cuts herself
Open on his teeth
Deliberately this time
Opens herself to him
She has opened his pants too
She lifts herself up
Pushes herself down
As at the same time
He embeds his fangs in her flesh
Filling his mouth with her
Filling herself with him
Iron and salt
And heat and strength
And he drinks in her warmth
And she rides his heat
Taking him into her
Over and over
And she is falling into her heartbeat
And drowning in her pulse
Her pulse rushing through him
Tears sliding down her cheeks
Unbearable
Blinding him with bloodlust
As he draws more
He must have more of her
And she clings to him
Pressing into him
Offering it all
Even as her life starts to slip away
She offers more
He hears her heartbeat slow
Her pulse weaken
Feels her fading
He can't let go
But then he does
Tearing his mouth out of her body
Her life flowing down his chin
And filling him
With warmth
With life
With her
He holds her in his arms
Marveling at her surrender
He draws a claw across his own chest
And offers himself
He presses her mouth against his flesh
And she drinks
Takes him in
Once again
And she is his
And he is hers
And she drinks
His power flowing into her
Burning through her
Ending her
Beginning her
Remaking her
And he feels his power growing in her
And she feeds...